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I know I’ve been absent for awhile and I tried to write this poem in time for both the Thursday Think Tank and the Thursday Poets Rally, but alas it is now Sunday. I am just getting around to posting it now for the Poetry Pantry and I hope everyone enjoys it!
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red bricks tumbling,
wasting away
this wall of cracked plaster,
crumbling, carried away on winds afar
graffiti rainbow
seen by all, hidden by one
with thoughts of her leaving,
hollow footfalls upon aged wood floors,
the very floor he meant to replace,
never did,
now couldn’t
as he watches his firstborn daughter
run naked, mother in tow
a faded mirage;
a howling swirl,
wind chimes wailing sirens call,
protesting the storm where doors slam
glass explodes,
glinting
a myriad reflection, setting summer sun
the color of fire, bombs fall upon
weakened base, last defense;
my wall collapses,
dust and debris scatter,
guillotine cleaves my bleeding heart
I cry
(c) by D. Wright 2010
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Hopefully I can get back to posting more frequently. Thanks to everyone that stopped by!
Life, Love & Misery 
your entry is always welcome,
very creative write….
Thanks for sharing!
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red bricks tumbling,
wasting away
this wall of cracked plaster,
crumbling, carried away on winds afar…
life is unpredictable, if you miss the chance, u may never be able to make it…
I love the word flow and the spirits in it…
Happy poetry day!
That was amazing, I loved the imagery.
My Poets Rally Poem: http://robinelizabeth58.wordpress.com/2010/08/05/falling-august-5-2010/
Very strong poem, evocative…….wonderful imahes, heart-tugging emotion. Well-done! Life sometimes hurts! You captured it well.
thank you for the kind words! come back any time!
So many strong images in this poem!
I’m glad you did post. Wonderful and complex mix of images. Solid. Thoughtful. – bill
thx bill, i really worked this one, wanted to capture a persons pain of loss and horrible realization of what people do when they put up walls. so far, i’m happy with the outcome!
Thoought provoking. pretty good.
Here’s mine: http://creativemotive.wordpress.com/2010/08/16/zephyr/
Great imagery and strong action and emotions. I enjoyed the perspective of this piece. Thanks!
your welcome! come back any time!
Really enjoyed the imagery!
wonderful poem, i imagine as read by a soldier
very powerful images, and you weave them into such a moving experience. nicely done.
Wonderful imagery and beautifully expressed:) xx
powerful descriptors, great job building images in the minds eye, good poem =]
What images you provide us with, but it was a very sad poem, too. I hope it wasn’t anything real. Fond wishes from Diane.
no, not a personal experience, but one that I sure many people have felt. I try to imagine pain into my writing for some reason… just my writing style! thanks for stopping by!
welcome link in old poems,
thanks for the visit to poetry pot luck party.
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hii
really nice! keep writing 🙂
hi,
nice one. yes. walls encase us. our own doing. we are own destruction.
-D
That was so sad…loved your selection of words. But the last two words did it for me “I cry”…such simple, small words yet so powerful.
Very well written. Deep with meanings.
reminded me of my childhood but it’s kinda weird since this is from a worn perspective. O_O
anyway, this made me think about some stuff =]
Wow … one emotionally charged piece. I especially love the stanza about the faded mirage: who hasn’t felt that type of longing, regret, would do over if you could. Beautiful!
so sad, you could feel the heartache. very powerful…. glad this was not your personal experience…. take care…
Lovely and somber. I can hear your voice through the vivid imagery.
great work,
Angela
Intense and beautiful– nicely done!
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The last line . . . I cry . . .
so powerfull….
Emotions are so hard to write about, specially those of others. Well done.
nice one
Cheers!!!
thanks! come back again! 🙂
Wonderful images you have given me here. Fantastic piece of writing, keep it up Kx
http://kashaw.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/casino-jinks/
This was really very vivid! I could picture it all!!
Excellently written!! WOW! So intense and rich in emotion…
This made me so sad. It is so moving and visual. These particular words spoke to me …graffiti rainbow/ seen by all, hidden by one
Thank you for sharing this.
graffiti rainbow was my favorite line in the whole poem. it creates so many cool visuals! come back any time, it’s always great to hear from you! take care!
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Intense emotions portrayed beautifully..