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Tears…

picture courtesy of Fort James, WA.

tears of loss,

tears of pain,

tears of just

because they came,

tears for war

and hate that’s made,

loss of life,

despair, dismay.

pray for souls

overseas,

make it safely

home to thee,

no more loss,

no more pain,

no more tears

shed in vain.

soldiers, innocents,

children alike,

cry for the sadness

of hopes demise:

war.

please say thanks

to women and men,

who do as he did

to keep hope:

alive.

(c) 2010 by D. Wright

Saw this pic when it was showcased on freshly pressed. It really highlights the sadness and destruction of life caused by war. I truly do hope to see this war end soon and that every troop returns home safely.

Also, this is still a working draft and any constructive feedback would be great (I’m not sure about the format of it… does it work?). Thanks in advance!

UPDATE: I recently learned about one shot wednesday so this poem just became my one shot wednesday poem!

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  1. mitchicus
    August 18, 2010 at 10:06 am

    Amazing work! You really capture the essence of the picture in your moving words. Thank you 🙂

    • August 18, 2010 at 10:57 am

      thank you for the kind comment

  2. August 18, 2010 at 11:47 am

    You capture the pain and futility of war well in your poem…thanks for sharing your words.

    • August 18, 2010 at 12:22 pm

      thanks for reading! stop by anytime!

  3. August 18, 2010 at 12:34 pm

    This has touched me…you have captured true feelings so very well. Thank you my friend xx

    • August 18, 2010 at 1:28 pm

      so far, this poem has accomplished more than I had hoped. thank you for the kind comments!

  4. dustus
    August 18, 2010 at 4:04 pm

    Beautiful poem. You got me at “no more loss, / no more pain, / no more tears / shed in vain.” Clear and eloquent lines. Thanks for linking up to One Shot! Appreciate your post. cheers

    • August 18, 2010 at 5:01 pm

      thanks for stopping by and reading. I really enjoy this and should be back next week!

  5. August 18, 2010 at 5:36 pm

    oh…a beautiful verse…and yes so sad for those whose lives are torn by warm…wether their family or the soliders sent…i am very thankful for them…

    • August 18, 2010 at 5:46 pm

      whether we support the war or not, i think we can ALL agree that it is sad for all parties involved… thanks for commenting!

  6. August 18, 2010 at 6:34 pm

    It is just the saddest thing…so beautifully expressed in your writing.

    • August 18, 2010 at 8:46 pm

      thank’s for visiting and such great words of praise.

  7. August 18, 2010 at 11:37 pm

    you put that together very well..and i couldnt agree more with your sentiment..thanks for writing this..pete

  8. August 19, 2010 at 8:42 am

    Dripping with emotion and a universal story, masterfully told. Beautiful.

  9. August 19, 2010 at 1:23 pm

    This is wonderful and I see what you mean by similar….thanks for writing this and I will be back. Have a good day my friend x

    • August 19, 2010 at 1:35 pm

      thx for stopping by… the sun is actually shining here in AK for a change so I willd DEFINITELY have a good day today!

  10. moondustwriter
    August 19, 2010 at 7:21 pm

    I love your sense of humanity that you convey in this piece and your haikus. We need to feel in order to change things

    Glad you came to One Shot

    moon Smiles

    • August 19, 2010 at 8:42 pm

      change is what I hope for… thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read my contributions.

  11. August 19, 2010 at 9:33 pm

    I love the simple usage of words to express your thoughts so clearly and poetically..
    Suja

  12. August 22, 2010 at 1:13 pm

    Touching, beautifully expressed.

    • August 22, 2010 at 5:29 pm

      thanks for reading and come back anytime!

  13. anastacia
    August 23, 2010 at 6:30 pm

    Words never have enough to say

    • August 23, 2010 at 8:47 pm

      no, sadly they don’t. thank you for stopping by.

  14. August 24, 2010 at 12:20 am

    A moving piece, and hopeful. Nicely done.

  15. August 24, 2010 at 12:49 pm

    Tears will come, Tears will fall, Tears will dry, Pain will come, pain will sting, pain will fade, But the memory will forever remain

    • August 24, 2010 at 4:36 pm

      nicely stated! thanks for stopping by and check back any time!

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